As some of
you may know, I published my second book this week. It’s always a bit daunting
when years of work go into something you’re just hoping someone might give a
chance to. The first impression (well other than the cover, and that might be another blog for a coming
week) is, of course, the opening line.
But what
makes a great opener? I’ve now published two of them, and while they may or may
not be great, I was certainly aware of the weight of how I chose to open each
story.
For the
record, my openers were these:
~ “So much
of Connor’s and her story had been told through pivots.” Enso
~ “Staring
out at glittering lights, like those which once imprisoned me, I freeze. Once
again, I freeze.” Bound in Neon
The point
to this blog is not to debate whether or not you liked these lines. It is not
even to debate whether you care for the others I’ve listed below. The
question is, and I think it is a fair one: What makes for a successful first
line?
Perhaps we
should begin with a few of the contenders. While there is no definitive list, a
perusing of this search engine or that will show that there are a few openers
which seem universally held in high regard. In no particular order whatsoever:
~ “It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking
thirteen.” George Orwell: 1984
~ “Mama
died today. Or yesterday maybe, I don’t know.” Albert Camus: The Stranger
What
each of these openers has is intrigue. Orwell not only balances an odd
combination of weather conditions, but then also hits us with the impossible
proposition that the clock has just struck thirteen. What Camus has done is
taken an event about which no one could ever forget the most minute of details and
somehow distanced his speaker from it in a matter of two sentences.
It
is notable that both of these openers are short (ish). Sure, neither is
Herman Melville’s three word classic, but neither approaches A Tale of Two Cities’ opening paragraph
sentence either. So, intriguing and not too long–is this that formula then?
Perhaps. But then a second group presents itself as well.
~ “Many
years later, as he faced the firing squad, Colonel Aureliano Buendía was to
remember that distant afternoon when his father took him to discover ice.” Gabriel
García Márquez: One Hundred Years of Solitude
~ “If
you really want to hear about it, the first thing you’ll probably want to know
is where I was born, and what my lousy childhood was like, and how my parents
were occupied and all before they had me, and all that David Copperfield kind
of crap, but I don’t feel like going into it, if you want to know the truth.” J.D. Salinger: The Catcher in the Rye
Both
of these sentences feature a narrator who is looking back to the past. What in
the world could have led from an outing with dad to a firing squad in the first
example? What could have happened to the narrator to make him so standoffish in the second?
Both of these examples feature a look back to where the story started. I must
admit that this is a style I find very attractive. Both of my stories start
with prologues, and I’ve always loved the “Here’s where I am. Now as to how I
got here” approach. However, one must also notice that each of these two
examples, once again, feature that level of intrigue.
So
is it length? Is it perspective? Or is it just a little bit of intriguing ambiguity?
Writers can’t even agree on whether good writing is determined by how many copies one sells or by the art of it all, so I’m sure there is no answer to be had.
All
I’d like to know is how my all-time favorite didn’t make a single one of the lists I
checked.
I'm surprised my favorite is so far down the list: "In the town, there were two mutes and they were always together." —Carson McCullers," The Heart is a Lonely Hunter (1940)
ReplyDeleteHi Brigid! That is a good one as well. I mean, clearly, any list is subjective, but still... It's amazing how many of these ARE on each list. I ran into the same thing with the Best Novels lists I used to research the Ulysses post... Does the world really agree on 18 of the top 20 novels? We can't even figure out which soft drink we like the best....
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